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Cliché describes it perfectly
(That time when the world was pure
But tainted)
Never totally wonderful
But successful in imagination
My thoughts never settled…
Fluttering as a moth,
At a lightbulb:
Close to the light,
But impeded by a layer,
Clear but firm.
Never a fully formed thought
Never a finished sentence in my—
I was told I was too young (or)
Too small to understand
But in my own world,
I comprehended everything.
I knew why the sun never shown
I knew why there was magic
I was too young to really know form
Denotation, colloquialisms, or parables
I focused on dialogue, characters and plot
My words flowed onto stark white, uninhibited
But now, poisoned by persuasion,
Disillusioned by diction,
I write with form and rhyme,
Without imagination or fiction.
More experience with age,
But a wish to fill this page,
With words broken and small,
But, instead, I've hit a wall.
(That time when the world was pure
But tainted)
Never totally wonderful
But successful in imagination
My thoughts never settled…
Fluttering as a moth,
At a lightbulb:
Close to the light,
But impeded by a layer,
Clear but firm.
Never a fully formed thought
Never a finished sentence in my—
I was told I was too young (or)
Too small to understand
But in my own world,
I comprehended everything.
I knew why the sun never shown
I knew why the stars had many colors
I knew why there was magic
I knew why forests melted to silver
I was too young to really know form
Denotation, colloquialisms, or parables
I focused on dialogue, characters and plot
My words flowed onto stark white, uninhibited
But now, poisoned by persuasion,
Disillusioned by diction,
I write with form and rhyme,
Without imagination or fiction.
More experience with age,
But a wish to fill this page,
With words broken and small,
But, instead, I've hit a wall.
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Evolution is good, knowledge, even better, for with these things, the human race has created multitudes of machines, medical procedures, artwork, literature, and many other things. The problem in this world of circumstance is that we lose ourselves in day to day activities and goals for the future. What college am I going to? What job will I have? Who is the one? How will I afford this house payment? We have lost the child-like nature that we need to cling to with everything we have.
Written for a poetry project with *trevor4056. My topic was my mind as a child versus my mind now and how the world has changed me.
What I hoped to present is the evolution of the free-thinking poet of a young age with no barriers or restrictions to the disciplined author who uses punctuation, diction, tone, mood and a serious topic.
I dedicate this work to Mary Shelly, the insane author of Frankenstein.
Written Revolution Questions...
1. Did I do a decent job at making the transition from child to adult clear and smooth, or should I do something to change it and make it more gradual?
2. Does the theme shine through?
3. Should I change some of my words to fit the age group I am trying to portray? Or would that make the poem harder to read?
AAAND the link to a constructive comment.
[link]
Written for a poetry project with *trevor4056. My topic was my mind as a child versus my mind now and how the world has changed me.
What I hoped to present is the evolution of the free-thinking poet of a young age with no barriers or restrictions to the disciplined author who uses punctuation, diction, tone, mood and a serious topic.
I dedicate this work to Mary Shelly, the insane author of Frankenstein.
Written Revolution Questions...
1. Did I do a decent job at making the transition from child to adult clear and smooth, or should I do something to change it and make it more gradual?
2. Does the theme shine through?
3. Should I change some of my words to fit the age group I am trying to portray? Or would that make the poem harder to read?
AAAND the link to a constructive comment.
[link]
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I think the fitting words with the age groups would be a wonderful change to the poem.
But i also love it this way too.
So either way it is good in my book=]
But i also love it this way too.
So either way it is good in my book=]